IELTS Writing Task 1: the making of sugar
I want to share a great Writing Task 1 answer written by my former student Anna Skopina . The task is a process description from IELTS 16 Test 2 - making sugar from sugar cane. With process descriptions, students usually have two problems: 1. The answer is either extremely short (= not fully developed) or extremely long (= with many irrelevant or even made-up details); 2. The description is mechanical and the stages are marked with same type of cohesive devices (first, then, in the next stage etc). Anna's description is well-balanced and contains a range of cohesive devices, especially ones to indicates stages and sequences. Try to notice them as you read it. ✽✽✽ The provided diagram gives information on the production of sugar, which is made from sugar cane. The process is divided into seven stages, including growing and harvesting sugar cane, extracting and purifying its juice, making syrup from the juice and, finally, separating sugar crystals from the syrup. The pr...